The best way to help underachieving pupils is to have compulsory after school activities which they must attend. This way they will become more involved in school and their grades will improve. To what extent do you agree?

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The best way to help underachieving
pupils
is to have compulsory
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school
activities which they must attend.
This
is because they will become more involved in
school
and their grades will improve.In my opinion, it has cons and
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.
This
is because we cannot make them
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if they have
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interests
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this
. It is argued that
,
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nowadays
pupils
are becoming laziness
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school
subjects because of no manual labour, idler or no
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.
Furthermore
, students are becoming underachieving
due to
uneducated teachers. And
also
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cause
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memories. When it comes to unskilled
pupils
, the best option is
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interests
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on
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them.
For example
, put them
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English courses or
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what
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they want without obligatory. The
after
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school
extra classes will assist in social interaction.
Moreover
,
this
method can
also
be a stress-buster among students.
In addition
,
this
is
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to improve
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to be well-educated and
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As a result
, it can help to be innovative minds which contribute to
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better marks and
to
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future jobs. In conclusion, the best way is
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practice for
pupils
.
As well as
boosts the studies with persevere
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concepts
without compulsory.
This
is because it cannot assist underachieving
pupils
to study hard and explore their
interests
. In my point of view, they should attend
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different courses as much as possible after
school
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underachieving pupils
  • compulsory after school activities
  • academic support
  • personalized attention
  • consistent participation
  • time management
  • discipline
  • teamwork
  • resentment
  • motivation
  • part-time jobs
  • family responsibilities
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