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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. But there is a major problem with the accommodation.

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Dear Sir, I am Mehwish Peter, a temporary student, enrolled in the “I.T Management” course staying at Royal's dormitory,
Room
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 no 27. I am writing
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 letter to make a complaint about the inconvenience that I am currently experiencing
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 the accommodation. At the time of filling application for the accommodation, I specifically selected a single
room
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 of 20 meters square with an attached bathroom, preferably close to the University.
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, I have been allotted a shared
room
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 without a connected bathroom.
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, the location is 3 KM far from my main campus, and it takes almost an hour to reach there. On top of it, the ventilation system of the
room
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 is dreadful, and sunlight hardly gets into my
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.
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, I would like you to change my place to the asked specifications. The
room
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 must equip with a reliable ventilation system and must have adequate space with a connected restroom. I am looking forward to hearing from you on
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 matter. Thank you in advance. Yours sincerely, Peter Parker
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