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The charts below show the average perchentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average perchentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts depict the proportions of additional
ingridents
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ingredients
 which are
sodium
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, saturated fat,
added
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and added
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 sugar on the typical diet of a person
in
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on
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 a daily basis. It can be clearly seen that the typical dinner and snacks have contains much more unnatural additives compared to
breakfast
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 and
lunch
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.
On the other hand
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,
breakfast
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 seems lesser evil than
lunch
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 and other meals. Dinner has
biggest
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the biggest
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 proportions by 43 % and 37% in terms of
sodium
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 and saturated fat additions in given meals respectively. Snacks contain
most
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the most
a most
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 majority of added sugar by %42,
is
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which is
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 completely doubled to
proportion
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the proportion
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 of saturated fat in the same meal. When it comes to
the
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apply
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lunch
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 and
breakfast
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, these two meals can be found that contain
least
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the least
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 given external nutrients totally. The
perchentage
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percentage
 of
sodium
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 and saturated fat have similarities by 29 and 26 in a
lunch
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 menu, respectively. With
only
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the only
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exception
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an exception
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in
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of
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sodium
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, all the other parameters have shown us
breakfast
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 seems most healthy meal among the given ones.
The similar
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Similar
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 perceptions occurred on saturated fat and added sugar with 16% for the typical
breakfast
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 menu.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, breakfast, lunch with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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