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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
Some people
belives
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 that
taxes
 for supporting
education
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the education
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system
 must not be forced
for
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on
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 parents who send their offspring to private
schools
. In my opinion, it is not a fair idea. First of all, Paying
taxes
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to help
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help
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helps
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 to develop
the
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a
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 better
education
system
 for all groups of society. The government could build new
schools
 in
poorer
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a poorer
the poorer
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part
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parts
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 of
country
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the country
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 and improve the quality of
educations
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education
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.
For instance
, in
Iran
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,Iran
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 we have several states
such
 as Sistan
which
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where
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 people do not have enough budget to send their
children
 to
the
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apply
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private
schools
. So,
government
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the government
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 should
developed
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 public
schools
 to observe educational justice and free access to
schools
 for all juveniles.
That is
 why all people including rich
families
 should pay
taxes
 for
education
,
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apply
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 because that
taxes
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tax
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constitutes
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constitute
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 a significant part of developing the educational
system
.
Secondly
, if
the
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wealthy
families
 do not pay
taxes
 for
education
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the education
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system
 the main cost of
develop
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developing
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schools
 falls on the shoulder of
the
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apply
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poor
families
. Unfortunately, most of that
families
 can not afford
paying
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to pay
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 that amount of
taxes
 for their
children
, and
children
forced
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are forced
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 to leave
the
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apply
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school.
As a result
, society will lose numerous talents from these
children
 who could serve their country in the future.
To sum up
, paying
taxes
 for
education
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the education
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system
facilitate
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facilitates
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 the development of
schools
 and college and all
children
 can continue their study.
In contrast
, Non-payment of educational
taxes
 by wealthy
families
 slows down the development of
schools
especially
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,especially
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 in
poorer
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the poorer
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area
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areas
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 and many
children
 are deprived of
education
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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