The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

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The map below gives information on the changes in a town after the building of a hydroelectric power dam

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

19 words

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The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

Students from disadvantaged families and rural areas are finding it difficult to get a university education in many countries. Some people believe that universities and authorities should help them so that they can get a university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Studying a language in a country where it is spoken by the majority of citizens is the best way to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?