Health experts say that walking is the best form of exercise; however, people now walk less. What could be the reason for this? What might encourage people to walk longer distance?

It has long been observed that
people
are less interested to work, though walking has a number of health benefits.
According to
the experts, it helps to calm our mind, lower stress
level
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and reduce body fat as well. But, modernity has made
people
lazy. I suppose
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self-determination and infrastructural development can encourage
people
doing a long
walk
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. Here, the following paragraphs aim to propose some
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to keep
people
walking and to keep
people
healthier. To start with, it is widely accepted that there is no exercise but walking is cheap and can be done by all age groups.
Inspite
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of that,
people
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gyms or hiring a personal trainer to
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weight. Studies show that modern cities are
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of parks, Gardens and wide footpaths where
people
can walk.
Consequently
,
people
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walk to reach school offices or other places that are not always far from their houses.
Moreover
, they are less facilitated to enjoy
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nature. In
this
context, Government should allocate budgets to construct national parks and stadiums to inspire children, youngsters and aged
people
.
Likewise
,
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of self-interest is one of the major reasons
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decline
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rate of walking. The invention of high-speed cars shortens the road.
Furthermore
,
people
can obtain all the necessary information like the dates of events, can buy
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online and
also
can join a meeting sitting at home.
This
way of life pushes them to live in comfort. In
such
a situation, public awareness could be raised
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organising
a walking competitions
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walking competitions
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at the local and regional levels. In a nutshell,
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modern trend demonstrates
the
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decrease in
long
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walk
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. As it harms in
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way
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, some steps should ne to be taken immediately.
Along with
governmental actions ,
people
themself need to be concerned.
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