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In modern society, it is possible to go shopping, work and accommodate via the internet without face to face contact with one another. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#society #work #internet #face #contact #development
There has been a lot of technological
evolvement
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 in today's society.
This
 leads to reduced
face to face
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contacts
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 in a lot of areas of life. Today I will be discussing the negative aspects of
this
 phenomenon. First of all, technological innovations can be difficult to teach and learn to operate. In the past few decades, the job equipment has changed beyond recognition. Because of that, older employees can find themselves unable to perform under current circumstances. Teaching how to manage the appliances requires more resources, specialists,
improvements
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 in the education system and schools. It is only a matter of time until a certain profession will be discarded as no longer needed and the people involved in it will lose their payment and similar social assurances.
Secondly
, the use of technology can cause various health problems. Most of the working hours are spent inside
due to
 the need to have a power source and certain weather conditions like rain that can damage the devices. Having to spend most of the day indoors decreases the time outside, eliminating walks and other physical activities.
This
 can cause weight gain, high blood pressure and other problems, even
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ones
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 mental health. Being in the sun
also
 helps to naturally produce vitamin D, which is essential to the human body.
On the other hand
,
innovation
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the innovation
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 of computers and the internet makes communication and a number of tasks way faster
as well as
 more convenient.
For example
,
sometime
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some time
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 ago the electric bill needed to be paid in person,
that
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which
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 means that to pay one would have to go to a special institution,
wait
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and wait
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 in
a
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apply
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line. The ability to do these kinds of tasks online saves time, energy and similar resources. All in all, technological advancements can have a big negative impact so
it
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they
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 should be thought out and used wisely.
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