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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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In today’s world, the average
age
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 gap between each generation is continuously increasing as time goes by, which means people tend to have children later than before. In my point of view, having children later in life brings more benefits than
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drawbacks that it creates. There is no doubt that having a kid at an older
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 can be harmful
for
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 both the woman giving birth and the
child
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being
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 born. Under natural circumstances, the human body is not supposed to handle the reproductive process during its senior years, even if the
child
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 is born successfully, the mother’s health can still be put at risk from blood loss or infections.
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, modern medical systems are developed enough to ensure the safety of the pregnancy and the newborn so it is much safer than it was before. Another disadvantage
about
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 late childbirth is the fact that the
parents’
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 and the kids’ generation’s
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 are far apart from each other, making it hard for the parents to relate
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 their kids’ social problems because they did not experience a similar situation back
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.
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, having kids at an older
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 means that they can focus their first years of adulthood
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 working without much concern
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 raising a baby at the same time. Jobs can be very stressful for a lot of people and they do not want to be bothered by having a
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. Raising a kid
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the
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 senior
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 means that they can have
further
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 preparation before having a
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,
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 can learn how to deal with most problems that their kids have. In conclusion, since modern medical treatment has diminished most senior birth problems, having a
child
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 later in life would be beneficial for a lot of people.
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