Experts say older people were happier and healteir in the past because they did more excercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas many now suffer from loneliness and health problems. What are the causes of this and what are some solutions ?
In the current world,
family
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the family
relationship
has been decreasing currently and people
do not spent
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spend
time
with their elderly as compered
to Correct your spelling
compared
past
so elder Correct article usage
the past
people
feel lonely, Correct word choice
and unheapy
unheapy
. Correct your spelling
unhappy
Also
, their health
are
seen Change the verb form
is
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as detrimentaly
detrimentaly
. Correct your spelling
detrimentally
detrimental
This
essay will provide reasons to old people
feel bad and give some solutions to solve this
circumstance.
One of the reasons of elderly suffer from loneliness and helth
issues is forgetting the importance of family Correct your spelling
health
relationship
. In the past, all Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
family
lived together and when they suffer from Fix the agreement mistake
families
somethings
or feel sick, they can get support from their family. Fix the agreement mistake
something
However
, todays
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today
people
seek their needs from their family and they want to handle on
by Change preposition
apply
on
.Correct your spelling
own
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Therefore
people
had interupting
their Correct your spelling
interrupting
relation
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relationships
of
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with
family
during Add an article
the family
a family
this
period.When people
become older, they can not help from their family so they feel alone.Secondly
,in the modern world, people
do not have enough time
for family becouse
they work for their Correct your spelling
because
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achievement
achievements
crazly
. In Correct your spelling
crazy
crazily
this
way, people
can not visit their parents
.Also
,they can not create time
for calling.Therefore
, elder people
do not help from their children
to fight with
loneliness and Change preposition
apply
finally
, their health
become
worse.
There are two solutions which are teaching Change the verb form
becomes
children
to how importent
of family Correct your spelling
important
relationship
and Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
children
need to call their parents
. First of all, people
do not have time
for Correct pronoun usage
their parent
parent
as mentioned before so their Fix the agreement mistake
parents
relations'
strong decrease Change noun form
relations
in
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over
time
. Poeplo
ought to Correct your spelling
People
theach
how Correct your spelling
teach
importent
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important
relationship
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relationships
as
early as possible for Add a missing verb
are as
this
reasons
and in the future, they will not face Fix the agreement mistake
reason
with
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apply
this
problem. Additionally
, children
have responsible.For instance
, call their parents
to know their health
,problems etc. Therefore
, elderly
do not think that Correct article usage
the elderly
i
am alone or feel upset. Change the capitalization
I
Moreover
. children
have to visit their family at least twice a year because these are our family and they reised
us. In short, if Correct your spelling
raised
children
learn the importance level of family relation ship
and they spent Correct your spelling
relationship
time
with it
, Correct pronoun usage
them
this
problem can be solved easly
.
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easily
To sum
up
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,up
everythink
that has been stated so far, elder Correct your spelling
everything
people
feel alone and health
problems getting significant because Correct pronoun usage
their health
people
forget how important of
family relations Change preposition
apply
and
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are and
people
do not catch time
for spending time
with their parents
.On the other hands
, if Fix the agreement mistake
hand
people
who
spend Correct pronoun usage
apply
time
with family and learn to
how important Change preposition
apply
of
family Change preposition
apply
relationship
Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
,
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are, elderly
elderly
do not feel alone and upset.Correct article usage
the elderly
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