Experts say older people were happier and healteir in the past because they did more excercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas many now suffer from loneliness and health problems.
In the current world,
the
family relationship has been decreasing currently and Correct article usage
apply
people
do not spend Use synonyms
time
with their elderly as compared to the past so elder Use synonyms
people
feel lonely, Use synonyms
unhappy
. Correct word choice
and unhappy
Also
, their Linking Words
health
is seen detrimentally. Use synonyms
This
essay will provide reasons to old Linking Words
people
feel bad and give some solutions to solve Use synonyms
this
circumstance.
One of the reasons of elderly suffer from loneliness and Linking Words
health
issues is forgetting the importance of family Use synonyms
relationships
. In the past, all families lived together and when they suffer from something or feel sick, they can get support from their family. Use synonyms
However
, today, Linking Words
people
seek their needs from their Use synonyms
family
and they want to handleFix the agreement mistake
families
Correct pronoun usage
them
by
own.Change preposition
on
Therefore
, Linking Words
people
had Use synonyms
interrupting
their Wrong verb form
interrupted
relationships
with Use synonyms
a
family during Correct article usage
apply
this
period.When Linking Words
people
become older, they can not help from their family so they feel alone.Use synonyms
Secondly
,in the modern world, Linking Words
people
do not have enough Use synonyms
time
for family because they work for their Use synonyms
achievement
crazily. In Fix the agreement mistake
achievements
this
way, Linking Words
people
can not visit their Use synonyms
parents
.Use synonyms
Also
,they can not create Linking Words
time
for calling.Use synonyms
Therefore
, elder Linking Words
people
do not help from their Use synonyms
children
to fight loneliness and Use synonyms
finally
, their Linking Words
health
becomes worse.
There are two solutions which are teaching Use synonyms
children
to how important Use synonyms
of
family Change preposition
apply
relationships
Use synonyms
and
Add a missing verb
are and
children
need to call their Use synonyms
parents
. First of all, Use synonyms
people
do not have Use synonyms
time
for Use synonyms
Use synonyms
parents
as mentioned before so their relations Correct pronoun usage
their parents
strong
decrease over Change the word
strongly
time
. Use synonyms
People
ought to teach how important Use synonyms
relationships
Use synonyms
as
early as possible Add a missing verb
are as
for
Linking Words
this
reason and in the future, they will not face Linking Words
this
problem. Linking Words
Additionally
, Linking Words
children
have responsible.Use synonyms
For instance
, call their Linking Words
parents
to know their Use synonyms
health
,problems etc. Use synonyms
Therefore
, the elderly do not think that Linking Words
i
am alone or feel upset. Change the capitalization
I
Moreover
. Linking Words
children
have to visit their Use synonyms
family
at least twice a year because these are our family and they raised us. In short, if Fix the agreement mistake
families
children
learn the importance level of family Use synonyms
relationship
and they spent Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
time
with them, Use synonyms
this
problem can be solved easily.
To sum ,up everything that has been stated so far, elder Linking Words
people
feel alone and their Use synonyms
health
problems getting significant because Use synonyms
people
forget how important family relations are and Use synonyms
people
do not catch Use synonyms
time
for spending Use synonyms
time
with their Use synonyms
parents
.Use synonyms
On the other hand
, if Linking Words
people
spend Use synonyms
time
with family and learn how important family Use synonyms
relationships
are, elderly the elderly do not feel alone and upset.Use synonyms
Submitted by yunussemreozkaya on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example