Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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In the modern era where there's an immense dystopia, status has become a crucial weapon for climbing up the social hierarchy. Nowadays, people go to ridiculous lengths to look rich, and to be seen as elite.

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, many buy unaffordable, yet unnecessary luxurious items and end up in great debt. From my perspective,

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the human desire of being at the top.

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, I believe serious measures should be taken, and one effective method would be to get rid of the present dystopia

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. The root of the issue lies within our behaviour of wanting to feel superior to others. Everyone from every social class, regardless of their financial status, possesses the need to feel superior, and society considers being able to buy designer clothes to be a status symbol.

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, people borrow money, only to buy things they can't afford.

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, they are praised for being "rich" by others, which leads the praised person to continue

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practice. Eventually trapping them in a circle of debt. Not many actions would work, thanks to civilization being

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way forever.

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, demolishing the barriers between the social hierarchy might.

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, if everyone gets equal chances and equal opportunities, the lower classes of people will vanish.

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means that individuals need to prove their wealth would

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fade.

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, the unaffordable will be affordable, and borrowing money will become a thing of the past. But, in order to destroy the system, it'd take centuries, if not decades, and would require geniuses with the abilities to reform civilization.

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falling into debt is a matter caused by the inequalities and individualities between humans. Fortunately, in my view, it's possible to stop! it once and for all. With the right amount of effort and participation from each and every one of us, it'll be achievable in a matter of some time.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

318 words

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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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Some people think that teenagers who commit crime should be treated the same way as adults criminals.To what extend do u agree or disagree?

Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, Thank him/her for the invitation Explain why you cannot come Ask him/her about other times to visit Write atleast 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear________.

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this stagement.

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What can be done to encourage people to buy local food?