Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Technology has been developing so it is
also
applied more in
other sector
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another sector
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such
as food, biology,
education
,etc. Especially in
education
,
computer
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the computer
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is being used more ,it is almost an indispensable tool in teaching and studying.
Therefore
, people argue about the positive and negative
side
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of using
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a computer
the computer
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computer
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computers
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in
education
. In my point of view,
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the computer
a computer
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computer
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computers
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can help us learn better so we should
use
it
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them
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more in
education
.
In
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the positive side,
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the computer
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computer
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can help a teacher teach
the
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apply
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students
easier. Teachers don’t need to
use
the blackboard much
instead
they can
use
the
computer
to show the lecture .
Moreover
, teachers
use
to project the images,
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mini games
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for the
students
understand
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the lesson and they feel excited when learning.
Beside
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, the
students
don’t need to bring a lot of
note book
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notebook
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, they can take a photo or write them on their
computer
and save it.
However
,
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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still
hidden
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hides
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the negative face. Some
students
addict
in
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to
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computer
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computers
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.
Althought
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Although
teacher is teaching, they
use
computer
use
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the
computer
for other purposes. They played
game
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games
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or watched
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the video
a video
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video
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videos
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,
did
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any work unrelated to
study
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studying
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while
teachers are teaching.
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,
use
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using
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computer
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the computer
a computer
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for a long time can
injured
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injure
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them
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the
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eyes. In conclusion, we recognize the
computer
give
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us
much benefit
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in
education
but it has
negative
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a negative
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effect if not used properly.
Therefore
, you must
use
computer
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the computer
a computer
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for the main purpose is
study
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the study
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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