Men occupy most of the top-level jobs. Should government reserve more jobs for women? Give your opinion.

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All over the world,most high-level positions are occupied by men. Some individuals opine that there should be a gender-based reservation for
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to give more opportunities to women.Personally,I disagree with the view and have sufficient arguments to justify my stand. There are apparent reasons why a
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for high-end posts can be
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, it will create a sense of discrimination among the employees.
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a woman is promoted to the CEO high-level position on the basis
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spite of lacking the skills,other capable and deserving candidates can lose their motivation,and
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may get divided into two segments which would be
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by two different genders.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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