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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as the Sahara desert or Antarctic. what are the benefits and disadvantage for tourist who visits such places?

#tourists #places #conditions #sahara #desert #antarctic #tourist #visits
It has been observed in many schools
to
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put more effort into
English
 education than the local language. Simultaneously, it has been discussed that local
languages
 are
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the
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risk of extinction. In my view,
although
English
 is the most important language in our lives, local
languages
 should be preserved to carry each country’s culture
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. Nowadays, it is called a globalization era, and countless cooperation and collaboration have been witnessed beyond the borders.
In other words
,
English
 is becoming more and more essential to our life. Needless to say, as we all live on the same planet of the Earth and tackle the climate crisis,
hence
 it is vital to collaborate across the country to combat the crisis via
English
 as a common language.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that
English
 is about to substitute with local
languages
. Local
languages
 are important to protect the culture of each country.
For instance
, to understand ancient history and
artifacts
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, we need to use local
languages
. To preserve local
languages
, I think that all products should show in both
in
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English
 and in local
languages
,
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 so that people always have a chance to look in their
languages
as well as
English
, which would remind people of their own
languages
. In conclusion,
while
English
 is truly important and all of us should learn it in
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school, preserving local
languages
are
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 equally important to protect
the
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 own cultures. To protect the
languages
, I think that manufacturers should show local
languages
 in all their products to provide customers to remind their
languages
.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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