All large companies should provide sports facility and social gathering place for local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
For
long
there is Correct article usage
a long
debate
that Add an article
a debate
the debate
companies
should provide sports
, gym
and social gathering Fix the agreement mistake
gyms
palces
for local Correct your spelling
places
place
communities
. I agree to
Change preposition
with
this
statement that large organizations should invest in it's
employees well being and provide facilities like Replace the word
its
sports
and social gatherings for local communities
. In the follwing
Correct your spelling
following
paragraphs
I shall discuss various ways in which these organizations should invest.
Large organizations have Add a comma
,paragraphs
responsibility
to provide some Add an article
a responsibility
the responsibility
falities
to Correct your spelling
facilities
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
employess
and local Correct your spelling
employees
communities
not only because they make huge profits but also
to show its
Correct pronoun usage
their
employess
that they care about them. Correct your spelling
employees
For
example
India has made it Add a comma
,example
compulsary
that Correct your spelling
compulsory
companies
should spend 1 percent
of their profits Change the spelling
per cent
for
corporate social responsibility, Change preposition
on
this
is in addition
to what companies
investment
in Replace the word
invest
employess
and local Correct your spelling
employees
communities
. Moreover
, by providing these facilities to its employees and local communities
companies
promote healthy
Correct article usage
a healthy
enviroment
for Correct your spelling
environment
people
within organization
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the organization
as well as
outside. Corporate spending in such
activites
should be Correct your spelling
activities
encoraged
by Correct your spelling
encouraged
government
and Correct article usage
the government
also
make policies accordingly
.
If we see any company in any location most people
working there are people
from local communities
, so it is important to
for Change preposition
apply
companies
to invest in these people
. This
will also
help in increasing Correct article usage
the organization
organization
reputation in that area. More and more Change noun form
organization's
people
will be engaged in sports
and local gatherings Correct word choice
and talks
talks
about the Change the verb form
talk
organization
and will be more eager to work for the company, in turn
Add the comma(s)
,turn
this
will help in attracting more local talent to the company. This
will also
increase moral
value of employees to Add an article
the moral
invlove
with the local Correct your spelling
involve
communities
and participate in the
Correct article usage
apply
sports
.
In Correct your spelling
conclusion
conclustion
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,conclustion
govenrments
should make policies to make larger Correct your spelling
governments
government
companies
to
invest in Change the verb form
apply
sports
and local communities
, by doing so this
will benifit
the Correct your spelling
benefit
organization
as well as
the
societyCorrect article usage
apply
both
.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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