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In future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your and answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As a result
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 of vast development in science and technology, automobiles will be driverless and travellers can enjoy
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travelling without
pay
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 their attention
on
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 driving. It may become a turning point
of
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 the transportation system and it may consist
some
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 drawbacks
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. I suppose that autonomous
vehicle
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vehicles
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 have disadvantages and disadvantages.
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 the future expectation and new innovations, most
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automobile
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the automobile
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 companies are doing
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an experiment
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experiment
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about
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 self-driving cars.
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, Elon Musk and his team have introduced automated
car
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cars
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 through Tesla company by using renewable energy sources.
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, it is optimistic for our future,
may
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 cause to build up a huge disaster. We can not trust artificial intelligence which
programmed
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 to continue the process of a vehicle, as technical devices always interpret wrong information
,
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 if it loses energy or threatens
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a virus.
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, it will make
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 accident and it will injure and cause
to
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lose
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 of lives
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. Not only that but
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, developing
driverless
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a driverless
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 transport system will cut down the driving job opportunities,
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as
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of
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that
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 unemployment rate will rise.
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, people have benefits of using fully automated cars and it will help to take a rest from their busy lifestyles.
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, it will make a comfortable and safe
jounery
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journey
 after finishing working hours.
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, they can concentrate
about
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another thing
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other things
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 without pay in attention
driving
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to driving
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.
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, they can read a book, listen to a
miusic
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music
, think deeply, etc.
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, I can conclude that
driveless
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 motor cars have profits and downsides
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, and it
depend
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 on the quality of the transportation method and the new innovations.
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