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The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.
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This
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chart
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 illustrates the money
consumption
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on
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 fast foods including
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
pizza
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 in Britain during the year 1919 .
By
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From
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 the
chart
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,it is obvious that
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hamburger
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hamburgers
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 had the highest earnings proportion
in contrast
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by
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to
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fish
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,
chips
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 and
pizza
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.Meanwhile,we notice that in both high and average income,
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hamburger
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the hamburger
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 was mostly used or
eats
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eaten
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 by people.
Pizza
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 was
choosed
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chosen
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 between
5to
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5 to
 10
percent
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per cent
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 and it had the lowest percentage of cost ,
while
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fish
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 and
chips
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 were the most available fast foods
in
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at
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 the same time. By looking at the other
chart
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 precisely,we understand that from
1970to
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1970 to
 1990
pizza
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 had a decreasing trend from approximately 300 to 200,so the amount of eating it and paying for it was declining. About
fish
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 and
chips
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,the second
chart
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 represents a completely increasing process
equall
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equal
equally
 to almost 400
vice
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and vice
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 versa.
Hamburger
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 is just like
fush
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fish
 and
chips
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 in
varing
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varying
 by a significant margin.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, hamburger, pizza, fish, chips with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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