The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.

The chart below shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain.
This
chart
illustrates the money
consumption
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consumed
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on
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by
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fast foods including
hamburger
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hamburgers
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,
pizza
,
fish
and
chips
in Britain during the year 1919 .
By
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the
chart
,it is obvious that
hamburger
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hamburgers
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had the highest earnings proportion
in contrast
by
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to
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fish
,
chips
and
pizza
.Meanwhile,we notice that in both high and average income,
hamburger
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the hamburger
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was mostly used or
eats
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eaten
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by people.
Pizza
was
choosed
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chosen
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between
5to
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5 to
10
percent
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per cent
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and it had the lowest percentage of cost ,
while
fish
and
chips
were the most available fast foods
in
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at
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the same time. By looking at the other
chart
precisely,we understand that from
1970to
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1970 to
1990
pizza
had a decreasing trend from approximately 300 to 200,so the amount of eating it and paying for it was declining. About
fish
and
chips
,the second
chart
represents a completely increasing process
equall
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equal
equally
to almost 400
vice
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and vice
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versa.
Hamburger
is just like
fush
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fish
and
chips
in
varing
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varying
by a significant margin.
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