Doctors, nurses and teachers make a great contribution to society and should be paid more than entertainment and sports celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?
Health care
professionals and instructors play a significant Correct your spelling
Healthcare
role
in society's well being
. Some Add a hyphen
well-being
people
believe that they be
given higher salaries than actors and Change the verb form
are
sports
industry. In my opinion, they should be given more increments every month as they Correct article usage
the sports
work
harder and raise youngsters of the nation
.
To commence with
, Mentors are the epitome of every Change preposition
apply
nation
's success. First and foremost, the child's basic education starts at initial schools when they are unable to learn education and social behaviours frlm
anyone except their teachers. Correct your spelling
from
Furthermore
, their duty and work
hours are extended in government institutions sometimes that
they go through hectic time schedules which Correct word choice
and
make
them frustrated at the moment. Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
For Example
, teachers working at school levels have tough duty hours like 8 to 12 hours a day including morning and night shifts but they are not being paid according to
their hardwork
.
Despite these, fitness trainers and medical professionals Correct your spelling
hard work
also
play crucial
Add an article
a crucial
role
in Fix the agreement mistake
roles
nation's
sustenance. Correct article usage
the nation's
Firstly
, doctors
are the only source of diagnosing not only people
's harmful ailments and infections but also
their daily health care routine. Moreover
, when any serious aliment
spreads all over the world only Correct your spelling
ailment
doctors
with specific areas of research in medical fields can make vaccines and possible outcome
to get rid of the Fix the agreement mistake
outcomes
the
temperature. To illustrate an example, During Covid 19, the major Remove the redundancy
apply
role
was
played by Unnecessary verb
apply
doctors
and medical rank in who played with their lives to safe
Replace the word
save
people
of the territories.
In conclusion, some people
suggest to give
more money to acting and sports Change the verb form
giving
persons
. From my perspective, the Replace the word
people
role
of doctors
and educators are
more as they Correct subject-verb agreement
is
work
for the nation
day and night so they should be contributed more by the government to appreciate their passion and hard work
towards public
.Add an article
the public
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite