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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should never make an important decision alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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This
 sentence that we humans should decide alonely is a true saying to some minor problems,
while
 for the major issues we have to get used
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 our adult's advice and consultancy,though I disagree with the statement because of the below reasons.
Firstly
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 we would get anxious and we can not make a decision very well،
thus
 it is essential to benefit from an advisor or person who aged and experienced a lot.
For example
,many teenagers don't know which field they should choose for their university ,
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meanwhile
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 their parents usually know their child's talents and they are able to help their child.
Secondly
, Parents are whom the children can rely on and meet their needs,
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fact that we are still young to produce everything.
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,if you want to get married, it is necessary that your parents know your future partner comprehensively.
Thirdly
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 we get in trouble and we become exhausted to solve that problem just on our own shoulders ,
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 we are forced to talk about our difficulty to someone else ,
hence
 he is a reliable man he will spare no pain to guide us.
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,it is common for girls that start a relationship with an unpropriot person through these conditions guidance may ease the way for us by his suggestion.
To sum up
, getting a piece of advice from wise and old people is crucial sometimes when we can not think carefully or when we are worried about the overcome
due to
 the reality that always quick and without reflection decisions are wrong.
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