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n many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion?

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The line graphs provide information about the variations in the percentages of three different kinds of electric applications and the number of hours spent on household chores per week in one country during the period from 1920 to 2019. Generally speaking, it is obvious that the percentage of ownership in the three types of applications increased dramatically over time,
whereas
 the hours of doing housework decreased substantially. In terms of household applications, there was a considerable growth of refrigerators from 1920 to 1960,from nearly 0% to 90%.
Subsequently
, the proportion of refrigerators reached 100% in 1980. In 1920, the percentage of vacuum cleaners was lower than washing machines, with 30% and 40%,respectively.
However
, there was a steady increase in vacuum cleaners between 1920 to 2000 and surpassed the proportion of washing machines in approximately 1942, at roughly 60%.
By contrast
, the proportion of washing machines growled gradually and stood at approximately 90% in 2019. With regard to the number of hours of doing household chores a week,
although
 there was a dramatic decline between 1920 to 1960, from 50% to 20%, it decreased slightly during the period from 1960 to 2019, from roughly 15% to 10%.
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