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You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

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 I have had the opportunity to visit or was adjective life in
Australia
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 for one year, it was not only two weeks but,
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 only
Australia
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 stay over two weeks, so that’s me make my reasons of
Australia
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 crate
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 topic. I was a lucky man in
Taiwan
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 because in
Taiwan
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 not everyone can discover
this
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 word, have some humans always stay in the place. 5 years before , I got sick of megrims, I won't kill myself, and
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 before I died should out of
Taiwan
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 once. So I got the opportunity to plan and do it.
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Secondly
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 I read many websites, a study which country was friendly to visit, and
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 I saw TV Chanel's name the king of adventure, the host YouShenWang went to
Australia
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 and share his experience there, I hear and feel I can try to work holiday saving money and for around the world after
Australia
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’s life, because there pay so much contrast with
Taiwan
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 espouse to my dream for around the world. ,
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Australia
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 is a giant place, and there has a rich ocean around there, I liked diving before out to
Taiwan
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,and I can practice my diving skills and enjoy the ocean view. Though my English is not well when I joined different talks, they encourage me [ don’t fear the world , just do it , in
Australia
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 more people can’t say any word of English, they can live so you better they , you can do better],they want to tell me
Australia
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’s people are friendly. Summerise, that’s the reason chose to stay and live in
Australia
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however
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 the moment rich my life and give me colour, wrote before I saw the king of discovery with his wife in
Australia
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 now and going to the place of memories so
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 topic really touches my heart.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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