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Precooked or convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#convenience #foods #methods #food #preparation
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 the innovation of microwave and other cooking devices, we have reached the limits of natural proportion
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, when simple sapience, waiting for it to pay off, demonstrates us an example of
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 increases within
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 taken over
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the cooking
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 there has been an effort from human innovation to decrease the
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 but no losses on the
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 as signs of Fast
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 or Ready to eat. But is it actually worth the money or is it
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one big scam decreasing the
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 of the
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, arguing within the speed of preparation
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 Are we able to find the future of cooking in
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 way, or is it just a waste of
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? Today, I am going to discuss the key questions regarding our tradition connecting to the culture and put an effort to solve
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 precooked foods may look like a good idea.The customer does not have to take apart his
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 to cook good
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, the prices of these products are necessarily high and
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invention
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 we are teaching young people to become independent, most of them are students and teenagers,
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 is giving
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 opportunity to their parents to take a rest after work and not preparing
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 for their little angels.
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 if we would take a look at nutrition worth or the
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, there may be a few disagreements regarding the correct way of independence or even rejection of traditional
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 as it happened in France regarding fast
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 in school
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. Most of the
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 precooked or convenience
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 is getting closer to Fast
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 than we would even believe. Within the decrement of the
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 taken to prepare the
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, the
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 naturally became impaired as the Ingredients have not been made to remain preeminent, but only prolonged. I personally believe that the best example we may find is Lasagne. Everybody loves them, but only an experienced cook knows that it is incredibly challenging to create
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 perfectly at the rate of Ingredients.
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, most of the
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 when someone is eating Lasagne at home, it has been already
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 and only prepared for one lonely evening. In my opinion, precooked or convenience
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 is not able to replace the traditional way of cooking, as the
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 is missing. Within
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 conclusion, I disagree with the statement that it is the future and personally believe in the tradition of our culture.
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