Some people believe that climate change has the greatest effect on people’s way of life. Others believe the economy of the region has the greatest effect. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many topics we can gain from newspapers or social media and
climate
change
is one of them. Nowadays, plenty of
people
assume
climate
change
can increase the temperature of the earth so it forces
people
to adapt
with
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to
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that situation.
Furthermore
, the
economy
in the place where we live
also
makes us adjust our lifestyle to
be
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fit with our environment.
Climate
change
has been a hot topic lately since it gives
great
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impact on humans and the most noticeable problem is an
increasing
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of
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in
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the earth
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earth
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earth's
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temperature. In Indonesia
for instance
,
people
who live in Bandung, which is known as
highland
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the highland
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, need Air Conditioner (AC) and it's an adaptation done by humans to keep feeling cold.
Climate
change
not only can affect temperature but
also
it
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apply
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makes
messy
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a messy
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weather
schedule.
This
random
weather
creates new habits that are made so
people
can go their whole lives without being bothered by the
weather
. Workers who always bring their
umbrella
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and consume vitamins are
behaviors
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that came from random
weather
problems.
People
who live in Jakarta and
people
who live in Semarang surely
has
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have
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different lifestyles and
it
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apply
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is because
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because
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ofbecause
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the
rate
of
economy
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the economy
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there.
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Regions
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Region
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The region
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, where have high rate economy make sellers,
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where
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that
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have high
rate
economy
make sellers can sell their products
with
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at
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high
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a high
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price
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prices
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as they know
people
who live there can afford to buy
it
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them
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.
Same
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way of selling can not
applied
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be applied
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in low
rate
economy
region
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regions
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. That
different
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difference
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makes
people
need to adjust their lifestyle to
place
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the place
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where they live.
For example
, Semarang
people
only need Rp 10.000 to get Nasi Padang (
Indonesia
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Indonesian
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traditional food) but in
Jakarta
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you need to spend as much money as Rp 15.000 to get the same food. Not only that
,
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but,
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the economic
rate
in a
region
also
give
impact
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impacts
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to
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apply
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the government
about
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on
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the tax
rate
. Either
climate
change
and
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or
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the region
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region
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region's
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economic
rate
can affect
people
’s
live
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lives
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. In my own opinion
climate
change
give more impact compared
region
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region's
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economic
rate
since
climate
change
could involve to world community but
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the region
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region
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region's
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economic
rate
only affects that
region
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • weather patterns
  • food production
  • water supply
  • natural disasters
  • health problems
  • migration
  • employment opportunities
  • housing affordability
  • infrastructure development
  • consumer choices
  • social mobility
  • intertwined
  • agricultural productivity
  • healthcare costs
  • solutions
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