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Nowadays, many families have both parents working. Some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while others think childcare centers provide the best care. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#families #parents #members #grandparents #care #children #childcare #centers
Children
 are the living
jewelry
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, all
parents
 in
this
 world want the best for their
child
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children
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.
Therefore
 they work hard to
fulfill
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 their
children
’s needs.
A
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 study conducted by Diponegoro University in 2018, published
in
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on
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 SINTA’s website,
one third
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 of
parents
 in Semarang, both father and mother working. It causes
parents
need
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 someone to take care of their child. Some
parents
 prefer to place their heir with their family
members
,
such
 as grandmother, and aunt.
On the other hand
, they trust a
childcare
center
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centre
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 with many facilities for their child. Family
members
 have been a part of
children
 since they are born and would be important for the offspring to be surrounded by a family atmosphere. Relations between
hence
 and family
members
 make
children
 grow up in a positive way and it
also
 makes bonds between family
members
more
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tight. Not only that, scions might adapt easily since who
takes
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take
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 care is their family
members
. One clear example is that grandparents put more effort into their
grandchild
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grandchildren
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hence
 they can gain memorable activities and make them a good example for their grandchildren. From an economic perspective, asking for help from families is cheaper, maybe even free and
this
 could help
parents
 to reduce household
spend
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. On the one hand,
childcare
center
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centers
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 have a great environment for our
children
 both educational and
psychologically
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 that helps them to polish up their language and communication skills. Another benefit of
childcare
center
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centers
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 is they have facilities
such
 as
play ground
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playground
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 which can use by scions to play and there they can meet new friends.
However
, offspring might be difficult to fit
with
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into
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 a new environment since they meet new people and need to interact with other
children
. All of that advantage is not free,
parents
 need to
paid
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 in some amount to
childcare
organization
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organizations
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 so
this
 option is not suitable
to
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poor
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family
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families
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. In conclusion,
although
 it is opined that
childcare
 organizations assist
children
 to enhance themselves with the help of staff, I support those who believe that keeping them at home is better in many aspects.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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