The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting andreporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided diagram illustrates the process of manufacturing
sugar
from sugar
cane. The process includes seven vital operations; growing, harvesting, crushing,purifying,evaporating,seperating
, drying and cooling. The procedure includes both humans and machines.
Correct your spelling
separating
Firstly
, it takes sugar
cane to grow up to 12-18 months until they become mature. As the second step, fully grown plants in large-scale farms, are harvest
by machines Wrong verb form
harvested
while
small-scale
farms Change preposition
in small-scale
harvesting
by humans, and Wrong verb form
harvest
then
hand it over to the manufacturing procedure. In the next stage, harvest goes through a crushing process, which involved a separate device, as a result
, it turns into juice which purifies through a limestone filter in the fourth step.
Purified extract from the filter, stores in a boiler and heats up until it evaporates and transforms juice into syrup. Next,
the event of separation of sugar
crystals from syrup occurs in the centrifuge. Finally
, the outcome from the centrifuge starts to dry and cool, which creates regular sugar
crystals.Submitted by dmdeemanthakasun on
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