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in the advertising businesses nowadys usually emphasise that their products are new in some way

#businesses #nowadys #emphasise #products
withe
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with
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 the
developing
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development
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 of modern technology and
economy
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the economy
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 industrial companies are trying to show that their
products
 are new in features.in my opinion,
this
 is a positive effect where it will make the consumer love and knows more about the product ,so it will eventually make them buy more.in
this
 essay,
i
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 will
discuse
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discuss
 both the reasons and
may
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opinion
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opinions
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.
to begin
 with, the
couses
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courses
causes
 of
buisnesses
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businesses
 illustrate
thier
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their
products
 as
its
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apply
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new in
varient
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various
 methods.
this
 technique is being used for several
reasonses
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reasons
 .
firstly
, if they do not do so, they will not sell their
products
 as the
compatation
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competition
computation
 is high
especially
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 between big companies.
secondly
,because sometimes the company do not
has
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 new goods to provide for the
market
, they
redesine
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redesign
redefine
redesigned
 the same invention, and
market
 it as
new
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a new
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 product.
for example
, APPLE company do
this
 every year with their
iphons
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iPhone
phones
siphons
furthermore
, in my opinion,
this
 is
positive
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 development for a quite few reasons. the most one ,which
i
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 want to mention
it
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is
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,
its
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apply
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give
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gives
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couses
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courses
causes
 for people
to
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the to
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bay
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buy
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 new things
thus
 will make
theme
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them
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 happy and feel good where
humin
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human
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 beans
engoy
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enjoy
 with shopping .
additionally
, since people do not know ,nor
they
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do they
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 have the time to know about
market
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the market
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 , advertising made them a
weare
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wearer
 of
products
 in the
market
 and its feature which will make them
bay
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buy
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 more .for instant, advertising on tv about cleaners where
it
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will help them in house cleaning if they bought it.
to conclude
, it is true that most
componies
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companies
 may use advertising to
manbulat
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manipulate
 populations to make them
astonshed
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astonished
by
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of
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 their invention
eventhough
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even though
 they are
lieing
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living
lying
.
however
, people love to
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buy
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bay
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buy
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 new
products
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