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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The number of teenagers who grow up in
families
 that have financial
issues
 is increasing gradually these days. Some people argue that these
children
 have more opportunities to handle
difficulties
 in later in
life
 than
children
 in rich
families
while
 other believe that both
children
 have enough chances to improve
problem-solving
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their problem-solving
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skills
. I agree with the latter opinion. Some maintain that teenagers whose
families
 face financial
issues
 can prepare to handle
difficulties
 more than those in wealthy
families
 because they frequently have hard times on a daily basis, and naturally obtain problem-solving
skills
. The reason why
children
 in finically poor conditions tend to obtain these
skills
 is that people basically brush up these
skills
through
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by
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 dealing with
difficulties
such
 as financial and educational problems. One of the prestigious universities in Japan reported that having a hard time in early
life
 builds better
skills
 to deal with the problems of adult
life
 than people who did not.
This
 is an example of why some argue that
children
having
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have
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 a hard time because their
families
 can be better at addressing
issues
.
However
, I believe that teenagers in rich
families
also
 have chances to improve their
skills
 to address problems. The reason for
this
 is that they can have access to many activities to improve
such
 abilities. Nowadays, schoolchildren who are brought up by wealthy parents tend to join a variety of social activities
such
 as internships and volunteering, and they build up essential
skills
 to handle
difficulties
 through
such
 activities.
For example
, when I was a university student, many students whose
families
 had plenty of money, actively joined internships and got strong problem-solving
skills
. In conclusion, these
children
 can have enough opportunities to deal with
difficulties
 in adult
life
.
To sum up
, That’s the reason why I disagree with the idea that
children
 whose family does not have large amounts of money can have more opportunities to address the
issues
 than those from rich
families
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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