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Some people the aim of university education is to help graduates get better job . Other believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society

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Nowadays , more and more
people
 are making the choice to go to
university
.
While
 some
people
 are of the opinion that the only purpose of
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university
 education is to find
good
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a good
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job
 . But , other humans think that society and
the
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apply
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individuals benefit in
much
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many
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 good ways. One of the main goals of
university
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a university
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 is to secure a better
job
.
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 of
people
 want to improve their skills . They think that one of the best ways to do
this
 is
get
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to get
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 a place
to
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at
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university
. If
who
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they
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have
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has
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 a qualification ,
this
 person can get a
job
easy
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easily
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.
That is
 why
,
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apply
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they try to get into
university
.
Moreover
 , these days , our complex world could use perfect personnel. Technology is growing up very fast .
That is
 why
,
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apply
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 employees have to
do
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that
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apply
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broaden
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to broaden
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 their
horizon
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horizons
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.
Also
 , they need to study
in
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at
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university
.
However
, there are other benefits for individuals and society.
Firstly
 , the independence of living away from home is
a
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apply
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useful.
This
 is because it can
helps
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help
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 students to develop their skills as other
people
.
In addition
 , many students will have to leave their families and meet new
people
 .
Also
,
makin
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making
 a friend in
other place
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another place
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.
As a result
, their life experience will increase. All things considered, I believe that
main
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the main
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 aim of
university
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a university
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 education is to get the best
job
 , there are
clearly
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clear
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 benefits
for
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to
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 getting a
job
 easy
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