Education should be compulsory discuss both views or give your opinon]

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The youngest children start their

education

in a crèche, where they mostly play but

also

do some early learning activities. I personally believe that

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nowadays children early learning worldly activities.

Furthermore

,the famous UK public

schools

are in fact private fee-paying

schools

.Between the ages of 11 and 18 young

people

take

wide

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range of subjects in arts, sciences and technical areas. In the UK,pupils can leave school at the age of 16,

although

many young

people

choose to remain in full-time

education

until the age of 18. From my point of view,

education

is developed in Great Britain,

also

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foreign countries too. In England

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it is compulsory for young

people

to continue with some form of

education

or training until they are 18 even if they

also

have a job. From 16 to 18 young

people

may study at secondary school or at a

sixth -form

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college, after which they may go on to higher

education

On the other hand

, the quality of

education

is not satisfactory in Uzbekistan.

Moreover

, is not enough experienced teacher and poor quality of

education

schools

Also

, is not enough condition in

schools

for students

study

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.Personally in my school is not enough experienced teachers. All in all, it is alleged that

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educational system better in

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the UK

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than Uzbekistan

this

is in my view.

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Education should be compulsory discuss both views or give your opinon]

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