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Day by day, it is easier, faster and cheaper to go
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anywhere, and more and more people are travelling to new destinations.
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as a positive change. On the bright side,
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increased tourism can bring economic benefits to local communities. It could create new jobs and positions, boost
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local businesses and provide an opportunity for people to show their culture and traditions to
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tourists, and through them, to the world.
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help to preserve the historical and cultural
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; providing funds for their care and maintenance.
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who visit these
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destinations will have the opportunity to know unique cultures, learn about different ways
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life and experience new food, dances, music, etc.
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the other hand, the high quantity of
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can have a negative impact on the environment,
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; leading
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, pollution and lack of resources.
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, the natural
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can be damaged.
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, governments and local communities have to invest in conserving natural sites and make aware tourists
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. In conclusion, the rising of visitors to locations previously used to be free of
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both positive and negative effects. As I said, I think it can be seen as a positive development as long as it is managed sustainably. To ensure that the negative effects are minimized, it is important for governments, communities, and businesses to work together to plan and manage tourism in a sustainable way.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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