IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world. /Users/elifceylan/Desktop/jpg

The table shows forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world. /Users/elifceylan/Desktop/jpg
#land #millions #hectares #parts #world #users #elifceylan #desktop #jpg
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The table illustrates the forested land in millions of
hectares
Use synonyms
 of different continents in the years
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
1990, 2000 and
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
2005. During
this
Linking Words
 time the African, North America, Oceanian and South American
forests
Change noun form
forest's
forests'
show examples
hectares
Use synonyms
 descended
overtime
Correct your spelling
over time
show examples
.
However
Linking Words
, whilst the other regions had a progressive decrease, the North American
forest
Use synonyms
 land remained stable between 2000 and 2005.
In addition
Linking Words
, from 1990 to 2005, Asia and Europe were the only ones
whom
Correct pronoun usage
that
show examples
 had an increase in their
forest
Use synonyms
area
Use synonyms
 were Asia and Europe. Regardless of the rise in the
forest
Use synonyms
hectares
Use synonyms
 between the time frame mentioned previously, in
2000
Add a comma
,2000
show examples
 the Asian forests had a slight reduction of their
hectares
Use synonyms
.
Moreover
Linking Words
, there is a significant difference in the
forest
Use synonyms
area
Use synonyms
 between the continents.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
while
Linking Words
 the vast majority of territories have an average of seven hundred
million
Use synonyms
hectares
Use synonyms
, Oceania had 197
million
Use synonyms
hectares
Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
 Europe had 1001
million
Use synonyms
hectares
Use synonyms
 of
forest
Use synonyms
area
Use synonyms
,
overall
Linking Words
 in 2005,
hence
Linking Words
 the country with the most
forest
Use synonyms
hectares
Use synonyms
.
Thus
Linking Words
,
subsequently
Linking Words
, South America comes in second place with the most
forest
Use synonyms
area
Use synonyms
. In 2005, the continent reported 882
million
Use synonyms
hectares
Use synonyms
 of
forest
Use synonyms
area
Use synonyms
hence
Linking Words
, 12
million
Use synonyms
hectares
Use synonyms
 less than the European continent.
To sum up
Linking Words
, the fluctuation of the
forest
Use synonyms
area
Use synonyms
 was different depending on the part of the world.
Submitted by heyohbruv on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "hence, while".
▼
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words hectares, forest, area, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: