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The diagram details the process of producing olive oil.

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the diagram illustrates the process by which olive oil is made.
overall
, the process requires 7 stages in total. it starts when olives are collected from trees before
experiecing
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experiencing
 several procedures, including rinsing, smashing, packaging, pressing and separating and
culminates
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 with the final products being delivered to stores for consumption. looking at detail, at the first step, olives are picked from trees, which are
then
 rinsed and smashed by a line machine. afterwards, olive stones are removed from
olive
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an olive
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 paste that
are
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 packaged into bags with holes. the process continues with
olieve
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olive
 paste being pressed in a machine and the
remainign
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remaining
 water is extracted from
oil
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the oil
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.
finally
, the final product is transported to shops for storage and selling to consumers.
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