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as communication technology develops, it changes the way we communicate with friends and family members compared to the past. Do you think this has more advantages and disvantages?

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The method to
contact
 companions and relations at the present is easier than in the
last
 decades,
due to
 the
communication
system
 transformed. There are lots of benefits to
this
 development, in my view, there are
also
 some drawbacks. On the one hand, there are many upsides.
Firstly
, people who live in other countries are able to make
contact
 with their family members who live in another place by mobile phone.
This
 advanced technology helps citizens to feel warm and more closely, even if they stay in each part of the world.
Moreover
, many researchers create a lot of applications which are eligible to
contact
 each other without any payments,
such
 as Line, What apps, Skype, and Facetime.
This
 can
also
call
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 by audio and video when compared with the past which
does
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did
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 not have these applications and needed to spend money when calling across countries.
On the other hand
, we still need to be attentive to some disadvantages.
To begin
, the
system
 of
communication
 is still not stable,
for instance
, when I phone my friend who
lives
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 in another province for a long time, my companion’s voice often disappears as the internet does not remain constant.
In addition
, the
communication
system
 is
also
 related to the internet or wifi. If the poor do not have money to afford the
internet
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,
this
 will cause them to be unable to keep in touch with others, resulting in inequality in societies. In conclusion,
although
 there are some drawbacks to the
communication
system
, in my opinion, there are various benefits to
enhance
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enable
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 citizens to
contact
 each other easily.
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task response
Expand on the disadvantages of modern communication technology to provide a more well-rounded view.
coherence cohesion
There is good use of linking words such as 'firstly', 'moreover', and 'in addition'. Ensure that ideas are connected more cohesively to improve overall coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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