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People are living in a ‘throwaway society’, using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

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Today's society is called the society of consumers. An average person buys a lot of
things
 and
then
 disposes of them in order to buy new
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. A high income is
the
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 reason for it.
Such
 behaviour can cause serious damage to the environment. There are several conditions which
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 a person to be a reckless consumer.
Modern
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 generation in well-developed countries has been brought up by parents with a high stable income.
As a result
 ,they have never lived in need and have not learned the real value of
things
. Another reason is that personal purchases are driven by aggressive advertisement,which provokes an individual to buy new
things
.
Moreover
, shopping malls have become a place to spend time.
Additionally
, in order to reduce stress and get emotions, people acquire new goods and they are getting addicted to shopping. If members of a community get rid of their stuff excessively it causes a few major problems. One of them is the necessity to recycle a huge amount of waste and build expensive highly-technological factories. Another drawback is that it is required to find a space for landfill sites.
Also
,
things
such
 as television and computers are
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desirable prey for the homeless and bums. In conclusion,the higher income offspring and their parents earn the more reckless they become. It leads to extensive landfill sites and
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level
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 of homeless and unemployed people. The possible solution is to
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 people how to take care
about
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environment
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 and, possibly, impose a tax on those, who
dispose
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 unreasonable
amount
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 of waste.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • fast-paced production
  • advertising
  • disposable goods
  • degradation
  • values shift
  • repair and reuse
  • environmental pollution
  • landfill overflow
  • natural resource depletion
  • carbon emissions
  • social inequality
  • labor exploitation
  • economic inefficiency
  • sustainable products
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