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The line graphs illustrate the statistics for international
tourist
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arrivals
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 in some  parts of the world from the year 1990 to 2005.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of international
tourist
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arrivals
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 increased in different parts of the world over the period of 15
years
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 but the highest
arrivals
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 were seen in North
America
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whereas
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 the lowest
arrivals
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 were seen in South
America
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 in 2005. In 1990, 70
million
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people
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 arrived in North
America
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,
however
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, only 30
million
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people
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 and 20
million
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people
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 arrived in Central and Eastern Europe and in South-East Asia respectively.
Thoughfor
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Though for
 the next 10
years
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,the amount of
tourist
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arrivals
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 increased moderately in North
America
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, Central and Eastern Europe  and South-East Asia but for the next 5
years
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 the
number
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 of international tourists decreased slightly making it nearly 90
million
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people
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.
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,international
tourist
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arrivals
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 increased steadily in Central and Eastern Europe and in South-East Asia for the next five
years
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 touching at about nearly  85
million
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people
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 and 50
million
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people
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 respectively. In 1990, the
number
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 of international tourists
were
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 the same for
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 and South
America
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 which were about 10
million
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people
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. Over the  next 15
years
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, the
number
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 of foreigners increased gradually in both
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 and South
America
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 but the
number
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 of foreigners
were
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 more in
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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 in comparison to South
America
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. In 2005, 20
million
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people
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 arrived in
Sub-Saharan
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Africa
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whereas
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 nearly 15
million
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people
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 arrived in South
America
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 which was the least among all the mentioned  countries.
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