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Schools concentrate far too much on traditional subjects which do not adequately prepare students for the realistic demands of the modern working world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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At present,
schools
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 give more emphasis on teaching traditional
knowledge
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 rather than teaching their
students
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 practical
knowledge
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 which they will need in later
life
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. Traditional
subjects
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  do not come in handy when it is time for the modern working world.
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 essay completely agrees with the above statement because traditional
subjects
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 do not teach us about the realistic demands of the modern world.
Firstly
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, traditional
subjects
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 like maths, physics, and chemistry help us to educate and enhance our 
knowledge
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 but it does not help us to know the basic needs of the modern world. It does not teach us how to save money, how to pay the bills or how to be a good citizen.
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schools
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 concentrate more on teaching these traditional
subjects
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 to their
students
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 it does not teach them how to lead a proper
life
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 .
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, a bright student may not be able to do good in
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due to
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 a lack of practical
knowledge
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. He may have huge
knowledge
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 about traditional
subjects
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 but he will not be able to succeed in
life
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 if he does not have practical
knowledge
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.
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, one who has
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 command of  traditional
subjects
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 will not be able to get  a job in future if he does not have practical and technical
knowledge
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 . Technical skills help us in future to lead a better
life
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which
schools
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 do not concentrate on.
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, most of the
schools
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 do not have their own playground,
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which
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 their
students
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 do not get to know about the  importance of maintaining their health. All in all, the
subjects
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 in which
schools
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 give more emphasis on  teaching do not prepare the
students
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 for their later
life
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.
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, they fall behind in the future and could not succeed.

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