More and more adults have continued to live with their parents for many years after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages of this choice outweigh disadvantages?

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After some
people
have finished
education
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their education
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and found their job, they choose to live with their
Parents
for many years. I believe that the advantages of
this
choice outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. On the one hand, some
people
living with their
parents
could save a large amount of money and deal with some difficulties in daily life.
For instance
,
people
could not pay for
the
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their
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water bill, gas bill, electric
bill
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bills
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and so on, because their
parents
can use their salary to pay for them. They can use
their
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them
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to do something that they enjoy.
Besides
, young
people
are busy working every single day, they do not have enough time to do housework,
such
as wash clothes,
cook
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cooking
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dinner and so on. Their
parents
can help them do some housework, so they save more time to have a rest.
On the other hand
, more and more young
people
are under pressure,
living
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and living
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with their
parents
could help them relieve their stress from their job. They can do some outdoor activities,
such
as football, basketball, and so on. It not only
help
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helps
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them relieve their stress but
also
strengthen their family bonds. If young
people
do not live with their
parents
, they may have a sense of
isolate
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isolation
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, and they may have nowhere to release their pressure. They may suffer from mental
disease
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diseases
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. In conclusion, my view is that living with
parents
has more advantages.
parents
play an important role in our daily life. We should cherish the days with our
parents
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial benefit
  • supportive network
  • cultural expectations
  • family cohabitation
  • family bonds
  • lack of privacy
  • personal space
  • emotional dependency
  • mental dependency
  • life's pressures
  • inter-generational conflicts
  • lifestyle differences
  • familial relationships
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