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Many people believe that spending a lot of money on celebrations (birthdays/weddings) is a waste of money. Others believe that it is important for the individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Firstly
, buying a
lot
 of supplies for a celebration leads to a
lot
 of waste.
For example
, most of the things needed to host a picnic are made from plastic because of
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 durability and cheapness. Unfortunately, plastic is greatly harmful to our planet- after breaking down, microplastics can pollute whole ecosystems and harm organisms. Choosing an alternative like wood or paper is better
due to
 the fact that it is biodegradable and falls apart easier. Food waste is another big problem with big get-togethers. There are lots of places in the world that are still lacking bread and water every day, so throwing away perfectly good meals is a big misuse.
Furthermore
, in my opinion, splurging on a luxurious gift is not necessary because it is the thought that counts. Getting something extravagant does not make it a wonderful present, in a
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, heartwarming or even handmade craft can go a long way. In my experience, the most valued items people around me and I own are these types of gifts from somebody close to us.
On the other hand
, I can see where the need to spend money on a main life event comes from.
This
 statement can be well illustrated by honeymoon vacations. A wedding is a huge celebration, which is usually followed by a pretty expensive vacation for the newlyweds, but it is a great way to mark the occasion and make unforgettable memories. Considering everything, I believe it is important to mark major events in life, but spending a large quantity of money is not the key to
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