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increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#tax #industries #pollution
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The environmental
pollution
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 caused by
industries
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,
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is a striking concern among all and it should be managed at any cost.
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 it is thought that hiking
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tax
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taxes
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 on particular
industries
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 will have a positive impact on nature, I believe,environmental
pollution
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 cannot be handled in that way as
companies
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 will put that extra burden on customers rather than correcting themselves.
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,most
of
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the
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industries
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 are managed through international
companies
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 and
financial
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the financial
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 stability of a
country
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 depends on them, enabling them to leave the
country
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 in
economical
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an economical
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 crisis.
Firstly
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,demand for a particular product governs the stability of that industry in the contemporary world and not the price.
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, in Srilanka demand for polythene was remarkably high during the past decade and the government imposed a
tax
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 on
polythene
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 industry as a step to minimize
pollution
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.
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.there was no reduction in usage
as well as
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 in
pollution
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, and
customer
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customers
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 paid the added value.
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, the government had to ban the industry and
to
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find a substitute in order to save the environment.
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,
economy
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 of a particular
country
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 depends on these
industries
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,
specially
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 when it concerns
the
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developing countries .Imposing
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tax
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a tax
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 on these internationally driven
industries
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,
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will lead
to
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them to
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leave
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 that particular
country
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 and
establish
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establishing
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 their
companies
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 in another
country
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.As an example,
fertilizer
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a fertilizer
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 company,which is originally from Japan, left Myanmar recently as
Myanmar
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the Myanmar
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 government increased the
tax
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 on a particular chemical that was used in the product after realizing that was toxic to
soil
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the soil
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.
Instesd
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Instead
 of replacing that harmful chemical with a bio-degradable substitute, the company left Myanmar and it was a hard blow to their economy. In conclusion, it is essential to preserve the environment from industrial
pollution
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 but the solution is not related
with
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 increasing the
tax
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 as it can affect detrimentally
on
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the economy of a given
country
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 and on the consumers rather than the
companies
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.
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