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Some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for businesses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Climate
change
 has recently become a crucial issue in any country, especially in the poorer countries where they got affected the most.
This
 situation leads to a massive
change
 in
business
 direction
that is
 going clearer on how to build a sustainable
business
 which does not give any negative impact on the environment. There are many new businesses growing up since they believe
this
climate
change
 situation is a great opportunity to develop a long-lasting profit. In the current circumstance, I am convinced that people can definitely find favourable ideas to make their
business
 sustainable.
For instance
, the sales of Tesla, which is a hybrid car, are significantly rising
due to
 the crisis of natural gas in Europe. People start to find another second choice to survive in the crisis and buy something that seems more beneficial in the long run.
On the other hand
, admittedly there are only several parts of businesses that may already experience the drawbacks as
climate
change
 is getting worse, not all of them.
For example
, the sales of single-use plastic and plastic straw surely get affected because of the massive movement from environmentalists and non-government organizations to save the earth, particularly to protect the ocean from
this
 plastic debris. In conclusion,
climate
change
 might indeed already affect the
business
 but only for types of businesses that have negative impacts on our environment as people nowadays have a tendency to consume eco-friendly products.
Thus
, it is safer and recommended that either the new
business
 or the older can adapt and build a sustainable
business
, so we can
also
 contribute to making sure that our future generations will not suffer in the future.
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