The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of experts in 2016 compared with 2015.
The bar chart and table illustrate the information about product categories of export earnings in comparison between 2015 and 2016. The unit amounts are given in
billion
.
Overall
, it can be seen that in both 2015 and 2016, all categories
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rose regularly except gems and jewellery which had decreased to 5.18% from 2015 to 2016.
Furthermore
, In both years, the most and least exported items were the same product, namely petroleum and Textiles respectively. In 2015, all types of products can be seen to continually decline. The product with the highest sales was petroleum which was 60
billion
. Engineered goods and gems were approximately 57 and 43
billion
, respectively.
However
, the agricultural products were half of the amounts of the largest export year or just over 30
billion
. In 2016, petroleum and engineered goods had nearly value 60 - 63
billion
. Following by gems and jewellery which was 40
billion
.
finally
, the smallest values were agricultural and textiles. Anywish, textiles increased as the highest figures of 15.24% from 2015 to 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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