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Giving lectures in auditorium to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching, with the technology available today there is no justification for it; and everything should be done online. Do you agree or disagree with this statement and give your opinion.

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With the rise in technology and online resources, online education is more possible than ever before. Going to large auditorium
lectures
are
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 avoidable as everything could be done online.
This
 essay will discuss why online
lectures
 should be a
definative
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definitive
 alternative to
students
,
while
also
 considering the fact that replacing all personal
lectures
 is not viable.  Online teaching has become increasingly popular
due to
 globalisation and enhanced technology globally. It has multiple significant benefits which will allow
students
 to be actively involved in their education
while
 not even being physically present. Learners who prefer to study in the comfort of their own
home
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 may benefit from online
lectures
 since they would rather attend an online session than
going
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 to the actual class. Absentise will reduce drastically and
consequently
 the pass rate will be much higher in the tertiary
educational
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 system.
Although
 there are numerous benefits to the cyber classroom, it may not be a plausible option for all
students
. Given the diverse classrooms
as
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experienced in all universities,
for example
, many
students
 do not have access to wireless internet connections or even own a laptop.
Hence
,
by
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apply
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substituting
subsituting
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 all formal
lectures
 with online classes will limit the
amount
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 of learners who
enroll
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 in tertiary
educational
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education
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 programs. In conclusion, there are multiple factors that will make online teaching beneficial,
however
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 it is not possible to exclude formal teaching entirely from the
currriculum
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curriculum
. It is my opinion that online
lectures
 should be an alternative to
choose
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 from, depending on the individual learner's circumstances and preferences.
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