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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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Many individuals think that nowadays,
research
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animals
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 is harmful and
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should be prevented. In fact, other
people
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 said that it is pivotal in terms of getting new findings that can be beneficial for science.
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 how the idea of
experiments
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 conducted on
animals
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 is justified and gives other
recomendation
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recommendation
recommendations
 towards
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 motion. It is believed that despite being
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controversy,
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animals
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 experimentation can be justified regarding the advantages of
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activitity
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activity
. Having an experiment to find
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a particular
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case
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 related to
animals
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 sometimes can not be done without the involvement of using the real parts of the
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animals
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 body.
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, the recent
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 conducted with a pig heart transplanted
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human
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 body to find an alternative transplant requires the animal organ.
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therefore
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 is advantageous to give a solution for human disease related to transplantation.
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, the existence of technology can faster the human job in doing science related to
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animals
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 experimentation which is more appropriate and efficient. With
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sophisticated
teachnology
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technology
, now
people
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 are able to use only
an individual cells
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an individual cell
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 without killing certain
animals
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 in doing the
experiments
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 like what a
reasearch
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 conducted recently in Japan. The
experiments
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 only
be
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 done by using dead cells to discover
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medication for cancer.
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therefore
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 think that it is
unecessary
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unnecessary
necessary
 to use a real
speciment
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specimens
specimen
 as a procedure for doing
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. In conclusion,
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argues
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 that
experiments
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 done with
animals
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is
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 bad, others believe that important discoveries can be made through
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 activities. Indeed,
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 it is done when there is no option,
however
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 with the
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existence
 of
technology
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people
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 start thinking
on
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 more efficient ways
on
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 doing
animals
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research
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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