Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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done with
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is harmful and
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should be prevented. In fact, other
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said that it is pivotal in terms of getting new findings that can be beneficial for science.
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essay will elaborate
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conducted on
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is justified and gives other
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towards
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motion. It is believed that despite being
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controversy,
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animals
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experimentation can be justified regarding the advantages of
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activitity
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. Having an experiment to find
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case
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related to
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sometimes can not be done without the involvement of using the real parts of the
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animals
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body.
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, the recent
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conducted with a pig heart transplanted
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human
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body to find an alternative transplant requires the animal organ.
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is advantageous to give a solution for human disease related to transplantation.
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, the existence of technology can faster the human job in doing science related to
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animals
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experimentation which is more appropriate and efficient. With
a
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sophisticated
teachnology
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, now
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are able to use only
an individual cells
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without killing certain
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in doing the
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like what a
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conducted recently in Japan. The
experiments
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only
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done by using dead cells to discover
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medication for cancer.
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think that it is
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to use a real
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as a procedure for doing
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. In conclusion,
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some
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that
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done with
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bad, others believe that important discoveries can be made through
such
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activities. Indeed,
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it is done when there is no option,
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with the
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of
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people
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start thinking
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more efficient ways
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doing
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research
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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