In the last few decades there have been more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media have no right to privacy. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, famous
persons
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are surrounded by
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of paparazzi who record all their personal details. Some people argued that celebrities do not deserve privacy and should expose their lives to
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public. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
point of view because everyone has the right to preserve his personal life. Fans have become crazy about following each
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of the private life of their idol. Indeed, they do not understand that famous people are
also
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who
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need to live in peace without being constantly disturbed by followers.
For instance
, many youngsters stay day and night next to the residence of celebrities in the hope to see them or taking a selfie with them.
This
behaviour is mainly
due to
the influence of media that spreads any scandal events in the breaking news.
Furthermore
, because of their selfish thinking, fans are convinced that the cost of becoming famous
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on exposing privacy to the public
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without
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individual choice.
As a result
, celebrities seeking
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glory and money find themselves exposing every
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even if they are opposed
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.
Moreover
,
this
invasive behaviour has caused mental issues and addiction to
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drug
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in order to reduce the pressure and sadness in
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kind
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knowned
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known
people. In conclusion, privacy should be a right for everyone even for the celebrity
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. It is essential to spread awareness in
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society, especially for the younger generations that lack
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morals and values.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hounded
  • sensational news
  • unwarranted scrutiny
  • blurs the line
  • public interest
  • pervasive
  • public persona
  • complex relationship
  • invasive
  • ethical frameworks
  • privacy is upheld
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