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Men and women are capable of doing all jobs equally well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every individual should be given equal opportunity to perform a
task
 that they are willing to do. In ancient times,
women
 were categorized as homemakers and
men
 used to go out to earn money. In the following paragraph, I will explain the ability to perform a
task
 for both genders.
Firstly
, as more and more people are educated they are understanding the fact that
women
 have the same brain and potential as
men
.
For example
, all the leading countries have
women
 presidents.
Men
 and
women
 together are making a financial decision for the world and many have climbed mount evert which was considered an impossible
task
 for
women
.
Secondly
, in the late 90s,
men
 used not cook as it was considered
women
's work but now the world has most of the top chefs in the nation who are mean.
For instance
, makeup was symbolism for
women
 but now
men
 have taken an interest and they are making money out of it. In
America
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 it was surveyed that 65% of
men
 became stay-at-home dads just to take care of their families which is a big change in society as
women
 were the ones who gave up their careers.
To sum up
, there is no
task
 that both genders can't perform and I believe if they go hand in hand the world would be a beautiful place to live as
women
 will feel the same and equally valued as
men
.
Moreover
, the government should bring certain plans where both
men
 and
women
 can come together and perform an activity.
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