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Immigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead?

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One of the things we can see today in our world is
people
 moving abroad and leaving their countries for many reasons,
such
 as looking for better opportunities or a better
life
. Nowadays, many
people
 are willing to have or to live new experiences, but not all of them are capable to do that in their own countries and the idea of moving abroad comes to their mind.
Moreover
, moving to another country sometimes means that the person needs to leave all of their
life
 behind to follow their own dream of having a better
life
 o sometimes better job opportunities, which they were not able to have in their own cities. There is a recent study that shows that
people
 moving abroad are closest to
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 their personal goals than if they stay in the place where they were born.
However
, immigration is not always a happy thing.
People
 who decided to leave their old
life
 and do whatever's necessary to reach the one that they always dreamed of, tended to face some kind of depression.
This
 is not a thing that happens many often, but it will be for those who were not capable of having the similar
life
 that they used to live.
Researches
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 says that finding a group of
people
 living the same situation that those who feel depressed, could help them
in
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leave the problem aside and start living the new period of their
life
 better and more positively. Considering all of
this
 I can say that moving abroad is not always a happy or easy thing for many
people
 even if they can reach their
life
's goals by doing that, they would need to be aware of what, the other side of that happiness, could bring.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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