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Some people say it is important to keep your home and workplace tidy, with everything organized and in the correct place. What is your opinion?

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It has been argued that keeping
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's residence and workplace well-organised and
cleaned
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 is significant and necessary.
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opionion
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opinion
 and supporting ideas. It is understandable
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why certain people might believe in the opposite way, which
are
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 that it is unnecessary to always clean up their home or workplace. The potential argument is that some of them might not have enough time to organise their documents or their things in the proper place.
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, some of them might not spend
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 majority of their time in their house or their workspace, resulting in
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 unaware of the necessity of keeping these places well-organised. I,
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, believe that the surrounding
environment
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 plays an important role in both professional and private
life
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. In terms of professional
life
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,
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 the psychological experiment, it states that the working
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have
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 a huge impact on
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productivity. To illustrate, participants who had been surrounded by an unorganised
work place
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,
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tended to finish their
task
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tasks
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 more slowly than those surrounded by
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one
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.
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, the participants
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 provided the other aspect that they not only
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felt less productive but
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 less motivated, resulting in which they, perhaps, needed to go outside the room to see a new
environment
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 in order to refresh their emotions and continued to work afterwards. Regarding private
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, a well-organised and
cleaned
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environment
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 is able to relieve their stress as it is
one
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 of the self-care strategies. People are likely to feel more relaxed and
calmed
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 when they are in a visually
pleasant
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environment
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. Psychologically, an unorganised
environment
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 is capable of exacerbating the existing mental ill health and being
one
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 of the risk factors
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 mental health as well. It is
thus
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 recommended, always cleaning up your space or organising things into their proper place is
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 of the self-care strategies that effectively enable people to prevent themselves from having and aggravating their mental
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such
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 as depression or anxiety. In conclusion, it is comprehensible that some might suppose that a tidy and organised
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 in their home or workplace is not significant. I,
on the other hand
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, believe that it has a huge impact on our
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, either professional or personal
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one
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,
according to
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psychological research and experiment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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