The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart gives information about how many overseas
turists
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tourists
visited different areas,
such
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as
coast
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the coast
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, mountains and lakes, in a European country over
20-year
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a 20-year
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period.
Overall
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, every
areas
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area
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followed a different trend, but the striking figure is that all of them somehow registered a raise
of
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in
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visitors from 1987. The unit of measurement is
thousands
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. It is evident that mountains
where
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were
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the only location that showed a consistent and steady increase in the whole period.
However
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, it reached a mere 35 thousand holidaymakers in 2007.
On the other hand
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, the coast attracted
the
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a
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higher number of people in 1987 (40
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thousands
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thousand
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).
Subsequently
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, it marked a marginal decrease of 5
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thousands
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thousand
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in 1992, to impressively skyrocketing to 75000 in the following 15 years, counting the vast number of overseas
tourist
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tourists
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. In regard to lake areas, the data shows a peculiar inclination.
Although
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,
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apply
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just 10000 people stayed in
this
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location in 1987, the number remarkably grew in a decade by 30
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thousands
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thousand
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and kept rising to 75000 until 2002, when the trend
drift
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drifted
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and overseas
turist
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tourist
pulmmeted
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plummeted
to 50 thousand.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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