Most people prefer shopping in supermarkets nowadays. How does this affect the local shops? What are the positive and negative impacts of this development?

In recent days, it is undeniable that many
people
intend to buy their needs in more complete markets
such
as
supermarkets
.
However
, some
people
hold a strong belief that
this
trend may have some negative impacts
for
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local shops. Given
this
situation, I believe that
this
phenomenon may be appeared because of some reasons and would impact local shops. On the
one
hand, most
supermarkets
provide more complete
items
. Targeting
to
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household consumers and business consumers, Almost all
supermarkets
sell some
items
more
complete
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than
local
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the local
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market
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markets
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that only sell
one
specific
items
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item
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.
This
reason
is probably
being
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a robust
reason
why most
people
will be attracted to buy something in
supermarkets
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rather
than traditional markets. To illustrate, when
people
want to buy meat and some office things like pens or papers, they might visit
supermarket
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rather than
local
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the local
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market
. It is because if they go to
local
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market
, they should have visited
to
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two types of local because
one
local
market
only
offer
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one
specific thing. Unlike
local
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the local
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market
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markets
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,
people
can buy both two things in
one
place if they buy from
supermarket
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the supermarket
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.
Thus
,
this
reason
may be best explain why most
people
prefer to buy something from
supermarket
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a supermarket
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. Relating to the previous
reason
,
although
shopping in
supermarkets
is favourable for some
people
, it can cause a benefit and a demerit for the local merchant. In terms of a positive effect,
people
can enjoy
supermarket
amenities like wifi, air conditioner, and trolley.
Nevertheless
,
This
activity can reduce
incomes
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the incomes
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of
people
who own their local markets. All in all,
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of
people
to shop from
supermarket
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the supermarket
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may be caused by the complexity of
items
.
Furthermore
, it
also
has
a
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merit for
people
,
of
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which they can enjoy other facilities in
supermarket
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the supermarket
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but, on
another
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the another
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side,
this
activity
also
can diminish
incomes
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the incomes
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of local merchants.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

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