Some people believe that children should do what their parents tell them to do; others think children must learn to think for themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.I
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pupils
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whatever guardians teach them.However
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in the upcoming paragraph.
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substantially
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know
childrens
because Correct your spelling
children
children's
parents
gave birth to them and Correct pronoun usage
their parents
learner's
guardian Correct article usage
the learner's
also
go
through their own aged group.Adding more to it it is better for Correct subject-verb agreement
goes
pupils
that if there
mother,father decide their future for them for their excellent growth Correct your spelling
their
im
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in
life
as they know about learners what wrong and right for them.Additionally
authors have full right to take a decision Add a comma
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for
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children
For
example
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pupils
are not listening to their parents
regarding their marriage purpose children do love marriage without taking any decisions for their guardians but end
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the end
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in their Correct your spelling
a lot
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unseccessful
.
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unsuccessful
On the other hand
in the
modern Correct article usage
apply
life
learners are very high potential and clever
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are clever
childhood
some Add a comma
,childhood
pupils
already decided about their career.Moreover
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childrens
are very independent nowadays Correct your spelling
children
although
they can travel without their parents
without any fear also
learners can live and study overseas independently without any parents
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parent's
parents'
ristriction
.Correct your spelling
restriction
Besides
that
they can set their own goal for their future.
In conclusion,In my Add a comma
,that
opinion
guardians have to let Add a comma
,opinion
them
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their
childrens
do whatever they want to become in their Correct your spelling
children
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are going
However
,parents
do not have to criticise their own life
schedule so,they can perform better in the future.Submitted by sharma1997.rahulthakur on
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- Sentence 2 - Example
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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